Why is this so horrible and elongated?

danihana said:
Why is this so horrible and elongated?

wait huh?

It looks like crap. Stop it.

from the TOKYOPOP translation...

If two people share the paopu fruit, their destinies become intertwined.
They'll remain a part of each other's lives, no matter what.

Shouldn't you be trying this before our departure?

Wha--?

If you're not going to, maybe I will...

Huh?

Wait a--

Hey, you two! Let's go!

See you later.

Uh...

Man...
...who does he think he is?!

[not sure if that "who" is capitalized or not, since everything's ALL-CAPS]

T5J8F8 said:
from the TOKYOPOP translation...

If two people share the paopu fruit, their destinies become intertwined.
They'll remain a part of each other's lives, no matter what.

Shouldn't you be trying this before our departure?

Wha--?

If you're not going to, maybe I will...

Huh?

Wait a--

Hey, you two! Let's go!

See you later.

Uh...

Man...
...who does he think he is?!

[not sure if that "who" is capitalized or not, since everything's ALL-CAPS]

I know!

OK, good? It was posted for general knowledge/comparison, not as some correctional jab.